Friday 21 June 2019

Narrative

kia ora my name is Manu for the last week or 2 me and my class has learning how to write a narrative. I learnt how use my imagination when I'm writing. I find narrative writing interesting because it was wasn't hard but it wasn't easy. My next step is to re-read and make shore my writing makes sense. My favorite part of the story is when he runes into a corna.
The wrong camp




One day 5 boys Josh, Herb, Sovren, Dontay and Manu traveled to a camping ground. On camp they did a lot of fun things like swimming, mud fights, fishing competitions and a hike. After all thos fun things they finish off with smores and a warm fire but the fire slowly fades away so Manu gos into the woods to gather more wood for the fire.




So Manu’s chast finishing up and hears a wolf howl he says “it all good that far away” as he farts but little did he know it was not very far away from him. It was like 5 feet away from him Manu hears a foot step and assumes it was his friends but he was very wrong he spots red glowing and sharp rusty teeth he was frightened by its growl he dropped the wood like they fazed threw his arms. Manu ran like the wind as what Manu assumed what was a wolf he wasn’t sure but as he was running he looked back and seen whatever it was just standing there then walked back into the shadow. But Manu didn’t care he was out but the dark fury thingy was chasing him Manu turned left and right to scared to remember where the camp was and instead of running to the camp he ran himself into the best corner ever right were the thingy wanted him. What a dumb fala. The thing caught Manu and slowly walking into the moonlight  Manu finally seen what it was and he was right it was a wolf he said to himself “I knew it” but to frightened move it’s like his body shutdown. Manu seen the wolfs dark fur its beady eyes it smiled at him it pounst and struck going for the killer blow the wolf thought he had died it glazed down at Manu and with Manus last glaze at the wolf Manu thought that the wolf said “ooh he dead”. The bros were getting worried cause Manu wasn’t coming back to camp so they scattered across camp Dontay finds Manu laid on the floor with some sort of bite on his neck Dontay carys Manu back to the camp and screams “I found him and he’s very knocked out so come quick”. They sprint back to camp like a horde of cows they take him to the nearest hospital and put him down very carefully on a big bed. 2 days has past they thought he was a goner but Manu wakes from his deep slumber. Manu freaks out wondering where he is he bounces off the big bed Na the huge bed he sprints threw the hallway feeling like he’d just got moari bashed he spots his friends and hits the breaks and throws it in reverse. His cousins see Manu they stand with surprise they sprint at Manu like wild bulls the bros capture Manu in their arms with joy and a warm feeling in their heart. They tell Manu all about what happened at camp he was shocked by the story that they had told. From that day on they NEVER EVER EVER EVER taken anyone to a camping ground with a warning sign on the fens.




Years has past we've all have jobs Josh is a rugby coach the best in the world. Herb is a boxing coach. Sovren is a tai boxing coach and dontay is a gym coach. Manu is one of thos people that look after old people. But on Fridays Manu don’t go to work because every full moon Manu don’t feel very whale Manu looks at the moon and transforms. He would lose control of himself he’d long nails his eyes will change his teeth will sharpen his arms and legs will grow longer he’d transform into a frightening werewolf. Every Friday he’ll go back to the place where this all started the wrong camp and he’ll always remember pieces of his night he’d always remember who waiting just lurking in the shadow the 1 who made Manu like this. The bark fury wolf and he looks out for Manu watching over Manu making sure he doesn't get into trouble Manu’s learning the way of the wild.

1 comment:

  1. Kia Ora Manu, my name is Mark. I’m a student at Paihia School. I was really impressed with your writing about Wrong Camp. When you said “dark fury thingy” it made me think about my parents dressing up as a “Dark Man/Dark Girl” I also learnt a new word “It’s” Its a shortcut word for It is. You could add “Its like his body shut down” I really like your blogpost and am wanting to see more of it! Also what costume are you going to wear on halloween?

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